Sunday, March 22, 2009

Hi,
Otto here. Sorry about the delay, I was really busy last week. From now on, I will try to post every Saturday or Sunday.

Okay, so now you are on the second paragraph. This is the first of 3-5 body paragraphs. It should either set the scene for the reader or introduce your first point.

Jeanne and her family are nine people among the thousands of Japanese-Americans that were interned in 1942 under Order 9066, which allowed the War Department to “define military areas in the western states and exclude from them anyone who might threaten the war effort.”(pg. 11) Her father is taken first, and sent to be interrogated at Fort Lincoln. Shortly after, the whole family is taken to Manzanar.

In this case, I used this paragraph to set the scene, telling the reader about the situation that Jeanne and all of the other Japanese-Americans were put in, thus leading into my answering of the prompt because I am showing what started the journey that helped her find her identity. Think of it as a house. You cannot start building until you have laid the foundation, and you can think of this paragraph as the foundation of the essay.

One of the most important things to remember in the body paragraphs is that you need to have some sort of proof, be it quotes or otherwise, to prove your point. If this is not done, your essay will fall apart.

2 comments:

  1. Gigidy! Very nice job, Otto...keep it up! :D

    -Fresh Writing

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  2. Hello Otto,

    Nice job. When will we be seeing a new post because it has been about a month now since your last one?

    Keep up the good work.

    -Resounding Glass

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